Wednesday 28 November 2012

Vampire screenplay

early in the cold morning, 
when everything was so quite and peaceful 
a girl walks from the mist on the dusted path that goes through the with morning moist all over the ground.

Girl - shivering and blowing the smoke from her mouth into the air.

From the bushes come a strange noise.

Girl- turns around to see but she did not see anyone

a man jumps front of her
girl- she get sudden scared and falls to ground

Man- your okay

Girl- who are you

Man- I am Mr Nil. I am sorry i really did not mean to scare you

Girl- never seen you in this village before

Man- staying in the mansion

Girl- mansion on the hill of the other side of the forest

Girl- strange

Man- something wrong

Girl- no.... it just that villagers say that whoever went there has never come back.

Man- may i ask whats your name

Girl- I am pia

Man- its nice to meet you pia

Man- excuse me please i have to leave now

Girl- sure

Pia watch as nil leaves then pia went ahead to her destination and when she looks back to see mr nil he is vanished from the site.

pia- where did he go, his eyes it was different, it looked that he is hiding something. what matter of mine, it is strange that he lives in that mansion no one ever went there since that accident happen as Mr John said. oh I am getting late.



3 comments:

  1. Www. Good attempt at dialogue and some description, not screenplay format but is the beginnings of an attempt to establish character

    Ebi. Capitals for names and beginnings of sentences. Focus more next time on how you could use action lines to develop the script further rather than relying on dialogue.

    Comment from other are not appropriate - please use the system properly

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